Die Writing

Taking a break

Posted in Uncategorized by erdaron on May 4, 2010


Owed. Paid.

Into it

Everything skips a beat, momentarily runs out of breath.

Words stumble and die, half way out of his mouth. The jaw hangs open, expecting the words that have lost their way and are not coming. His gaze loses focus and slides off somewhere. Not event toward the attractive waitress, or the people just walking in, but rather toward an entirely ordinary pot of flowers in a dirty corner. Slowly, uncertainly, he rests his hand on the table near the coffee. The smoke pools, briefly, then a slight breeze picks it up, barely off the tablecloth, descending gently toward the floor.

She was leaning forward, elbows on the table, resting her chin on her hands. Her eyes, previously fixed on his, drift slightly up and away. Her focus meanders out of the cafe, down the street, and eventually attaches itself to a bus a block down the street. The bus immediately makes a turn and disappears behind a building. Her eyes fix on the corner for a while, then lose focus entirely. She lets out her breath slowly through her pursed lips.

“Right, so…” he says, finally drawing himself back into the present scene.

“Um, yes,” she affirms something.

The world regains its composure, and sounds of the bustle hurriedly return.

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  1. Akashio said, on May 5, 2010 at 7:10 am

    Nice writing, Erdaron. I like the slow and full deviance from time-pushed reality. If you ever need some help promoting your blog or want to do a small fiction together somehow, let me know. Best of luck!

    • erdaron said, on May 5, 2010 at 5:39 pm

      Thanks, Akashio. I think right now I’m just trying to regain my writing legs. Maybe once I get more confidence back, I’d be up for working with someone else :).

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